"ToMay cHuyEe"

feona · 07:32 PM

toMay chuYee

amar ache mon tomar mondire
ami bihoshito tomate!!!
amar ache piash tomar kache
tomar ache badhon karo sathe.
amar hathe ‘rokto joba’ tomai dite
tomar hathe ‘shet korobi’age thekei.
amar ache shur tomay dite
tomar ache shuronjona ‘boddo kache‘.
amar ache akangkha tomay pete
tomar ache protisruti karo sathe.
amar ache badha tomar kache jete
Tomar hidoy gatha ache‘karo sathe‘.
amar hat shunno pore thakuk aaj…
tomar mathai rangao ‘shurovir’tajj

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Awesome expression, thou i quite didn't understand few lines.

Thanks

**Prova** · 11:58 PM

Nice one Feona......but this thread shud have an eye-catching title....don u think so?...!!!

**BoIRaGi** · November 22nd, 2007, 11:58 PM

nice poem feOna ...... tnkx for sharing !!!

feona · 01:06 AM

yup thread title shud b "ToMay cHuyEe"

PROVA-culd u change it 4 me

tomake chuye dite chi
rongdhonur sob ronge,
godhulir lalav mekhe
krishno churar
roktim saje....
sisir vejha papri hoye
sonali roder horoshe.
sada sari te
bristi te vhije
kono ak shajhe
nupurer jhomoke
bad vhanga hashite
tomar ridoy chuye dite chi
sob tuku vholobasha dea

tomay chuye dite chi
laaj-vhoy vhenge
nijhumota ched kore
puro rojoni jure
purnimar ai rate
vhora jochonar majhe.
akasher tarader sathe
patar shon son batashe,
hasnahenar gondho mekhe
prokritir oporup shajee.
gucho gucho mala khopi jorea
muhu muhu hashite
neshatur akhite
mrioman dhonite
oshoisnu chokite
oboghahone tomate
tomy chuye dite chi
somudro somo uttal hoye

**BoIRaGi** · November 23rd, 2007, 03:29 AM

Provar hoye ami edit kore dilam thread name -- ( "ToMay cHuyEe" )

bah ... tumi to besh shundor poem lekha shuru korechO feOna

feona · 09:09 AM

aaj ker din ta kemon jeno
noy oti shadharon!!!!!!
tobe poribortito hote kotokkon?
jodi tomar podho dhoni shuni ai prate.

aaj ker din ta hote pare aro beshi ujjol
tumi jodi, vherao khea ai gathe...

aaj ker din ta noy oti ochena
roj-kar badha-dhora gibon
hote pare modhumoy jodi asho kache.

aaj ker din ta probahoman din bodoler khelai
hote pare shoronio tomar ak ta phone callA

onuvhuti gulo 'bichitro'
kokhono prosfutito,
kokhono joragrosto,
kokhono badhahin motto.

onuvhuti gulo 'bichitro'
kokhono utchashe,
kokhono ashashe,
shuk-shomvhog r abage
gurnioman akashe
badha mane na
kono prokashe.

onuvhuti gulo 'bichitro'
kokono shuk khoje r sathi
kokono tomay,
kokono kobitay,
bolchi nir didhai..

onuvhuti gulo 'bichitro'
tomay khoje
tori-gori
shunte ki paow
sai aha-jhari?

**Rio** · November 24th, 2007, 07:39 AM

tumi mia poem o likho khaiche gr8 . nice poem dosto.thanks for share.

CorE · November 24th, 2007, 09:26 AM

	Quote:			Originally Posted by feona
	toMay chuYee amar ache akangkha tomay pete tomar ache protisruti karo sathe. amar ache badha tomar kache jete Tomar hidoy gatha ache‘karo sathe‘.

I shall say You write pretty well in fact better than a lot around here.. good expression and didnt ruin a bit of it.. But these 4 lines supposally 2 different verses using karo sathe in both verses made it look bit .... Just dont put 2 same expression or words just to rhyme.. Thanks for your poem..

feona · November 25th, 2007, 10:25 AM

hoy to kono ak sondhai..
dur theke vheshe aashche
amar kono gaowa gan.
moner ojante uki dilo
fele asha shai otit.
piche fire hatre khojo
maya moy smrity…
porbe mone shei cranti kal,
somoyer biborte
dhulo makha japsha.
hoyto mukhe pure
ciggerater dhowa
digro shas mishea
haway chere deowa.
hoy to rini-jhini
kakoner sobdhe
piche fire khujbe amake,
kintu she to ami noi
tomar ordhangini.....

vhalobashis tui
jani bilokkhon,
dupur kinba shajhe.
vholobashis tuiE ‘amake’
rodrer khoro tape
poush kingba maghe.
vhalobashis tui jani amakei
ronger alor chota
dur theke vhashe.
vhalobashis 'tui se amakei
hok na ta ogochalo
hok na elomelo
amar tobuO lagbe vhalo !

jake ami chuye dite chi
se tumi now
jake ami akanto kache pete chi
se tumi now
jar kotha vhebe ami likhi
she tumi now
jar chokhe

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